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Beyond the spray of clouds
Gliding towards the sun, far
Past the sun sharpened blue skies
Where fallen star trails echo
Through an eternity of twinkling
White speckled darkness; in dreams
Of other when's and where's, of
Parallel paths that bend with light,
Soar with sound and twist
With the bitter taste of ash
And sorrow, yet never
A touch of hope...

Of recognition through the rings
Of Saturn; flowing like Mercury,
Quicksilver around every star
Shivering beacon fading to be
Free of degrading orbits compromising
Some fateful fall into a union
Born in the vacuum, born to burn
Through its' icy cold
Emotionless
Depth...

To parallel eyes beseeching the night
Sky for some celestial route to a lost
Peace of personal universe, hidden
In the sightlines to Mars, under the
Darkness slowly sucking Pluto
Into meteoric fragments flowing
Lost in the ghostly waves washing
Neptune's hydrogen shores and
Methane skies, in wondering why
Jupiter grew to prominence
And yet failed to be
A star...

Shedding some smoldering silver
Light on Uranus's everlastingly blue
Featureless sorrow crying amonial
Tears for a love forsaken before time
Was a measured concept, compelling
Grief to heal and scars to fade within
The featureless black recesses of souls
Still searching for a singularity born
In the merging of two satellites chasing
The same ideals and wondering why
They never met
On Venus.
©2002-2009 ~summerdies
:iconsummerdies:

Author's Comments

A poem.

Thank you Volantis, I submitted the wrong version.

Daily Deviation

Given 2002-12-20

Summerdies is one of those poets who can leave you breathless in his words. This poem proves my point in the very first stanza when he says, "Where fallen star trails echo Through an eternity of twinkling White speckled darkness;" Need I say more? I give you Variable Skies by summerdies (Selected by +jsenn) (Featured by °jsenn)

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:iconliquidshaneo:
beautiful

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i never ment to bring us here... im sorry

:dalogo: Senior Member-
Maybe Im Lying
:iconconflicted7769:
there is def a lot of background that went in to this...what a setting in the mind...the pic. is mystical amost and yet still left to the reader to form as they go along...and yet it's not all about the stars and the shy is it?


it's a bit sad actually...this is one I could re read and get a diff story each time I would say...

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rob

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"both hands... now use both hands.. no don't close your eyes I am writting graffitte on your body I am drawing the story of how hard we try" ani D
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:iconvolantis:
"of
Parallel paths that bend with light,
Soar with sound and twist
With the bitter taste of ash
And sorrow"

"Of recognition through the rings
Of Saturn; flowing like Mercury,
Quicksilver around every star"

this is a beautiful poem, full of wistful imagesand descriptions...
just one thing I'd like to know:in the 3rd stanza, did you mean "personal' or 'personnel'?
:iconnamaste:
gorgeous words, astounding images. thank you. :) (Smile)
:icon-tank:
wow...this is one of the most amazing poems i've ever read...your talent has left me in awe...+favlove
-tank

-=don't fear to imagine=-
:iconvalhalla13:
In the merging of two satellites chasing
The same ideals and wondering why
They never met
On Venus.

oh my...
this is sooo incredibly beautiful... why did it not show up on my watch!?
+favlove
:iconjsenn:
How wonderful! I swear your words seems plucked from the night sky. They are magical, full of emotion, full of wonder...they are simply excellent, they are spellbinding.

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J:heart:y
:icondrevan:
:awesome: i just can't believe it

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betty swallocs
:iconphixion:
Can't fathom a whole lot of adjectives to use to describe this one. Very commendable. An easy favorite. Keep up the great work.
:iconlavenderpony:
I didn't know what to expect, but I was very pleasantly surprised.

-neely

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don't let any spiders bite you on the dick.

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